Dante's Customs

~Name~: White World Entrance
Type Genjutsu
Rank: C-Rank
Element: N/A
Description: The user emits a flash of white light from his body upon making a hand seal. Anyone to see this white flash, other than the user, will be drawn into an all white world. They will be in the same terrain but everything is white in color. Those affected by the jutsu will appear in color to each other. The user will not be present to those affected. This technique can last up to 3 turns. Those affected can escape using genjutsu release of an higher output than the technique.(Must use B-rank amount of chakra for Genjutsu Release) Those affected may also be released by actual physical pain equal to being stabbed. Or someone not affected by White World Entrance may attack the user and break the concentration or use Genjutsu Release on someone affected.(B-Rank chakra output)

~Name~: White World Technique: Red Rush
Type Genjutsu
Rank: B-Rank
Element:N/A
Description: This may only be used on those affected by 'White World Entrance'. The user floods the white world with a torrent of red liquid(most likely water). Those in the white world may try to escape this torrent, but doing so will mentally exhaust them. The torrent of red water seems non stop and will eventually submerge those in the white world. Like reality, those under the red water will not be able to breath. Once they 'drown' in this red torrent, they will be released from this white world. If they drown within this red torrent, they're only put into a deep sleep(coma) for certain amount of time. The time it takes to wake from this sleep depends on their rank.(S-Rank: 1 Post, A-Rank: 2 Post, A/B Rank or Sp. Jounin: 3 Post, B-Rank: 4 Post, C-Rank: 5 Post) To escape from the White World while this technique is in effect would require the user to sever a small limb.(Hand, Foot, Etc.) Alternatively, they may have someone not affected by white world release them from it by attacking the user to break the connection, or use Genjutsu Release(A-Rank Chakra ouput) on them. If the affected have drowned, they will not wake for some time regardless.

~Name~:White World Technique: Infinite Static
TypeGenjutsu
Rank: B-Rank
Element:N/A
Description: This technique can only be used on someone affected by 'White World Entrance' The user creates a intricate electric field within the white world. The field of electricity will flow like water as it spreads throughout the white world. Those affected can try to run from this blue electricity but this will mentally exhaust them for it is a nonstop flow. Once caught in the electric torrent, the affected will feel a extreme amount of pain from every inch of their body. This will induce an epileptic fit with painful convulsions in reality. Once the fit is over, they are released from the White World. Physical movement is slowed significantly as they try to recollect themselves, using jutsu is not possible. The time it takes to get hold of their body and will depend on their rank.(S-Rank: 1 Post, A-Rank: 2 Post, A/B Rank or Sp. Jounin: 3 Post, B-Rank: 4 Post, C-Rank: 5 Post) To escape from the White World while this technique is in effect would require the user to sever a small limb.(Hand, Foot, Etc.) Alternatively, they may have someone not affected by white world release them from it by attacking the user to break the connection, or use Genjutsu Release(A-Rank Chakra output) on them.

~Name~:Thunder Roar
TypeKenjutsu, Taijutsu
Rank:C-Rank
Element:Storm
Description: Using a bladed weapon(Kunai, Shuriken, Sword, Etc) as a medium, the user channels storm element chakra into the object to cause an electromagnetic push. This grants the bladed object the ability to deflect metal projectiles with great ease if they come within 3 inches of the bladed object. It also increases knock back force when held bladed weapons come in contact with other metal objects. For instance, a katana under these effects vs another katana wouldn't push against each other when clashing, instead the other weapon would be forced back upon impact, creating an opening for the user. The weapon is knocked back with 10 pounds of force. This technique proves its usefulness as it can make a simple kunai function well enough to defend against a katana. When weapons are under the influence of this technique, inconsistent sparks of electricity tend to flow along their edge.

~Name~:Storm Release: Thunder Pack Barrage
Type Ninjutsu
Rank: B-Rank
Element: Storm
Description: The user creates 3 vicious dogs made of storm element chakra. The dogs don't have an actual defined shape, but are more like cloudy creatures that look like dogs. These dogs are also charged electrically. When their teeth bite into the target, they send a surge of electricity through their body, immobilizing them. These dogs can also rip the flesh away from the target, so they're deadly. Physically destroying these dogs is possible but requires a lot of strength, so it would be easier to use an elemental attack of equal or greater rank. These dogs last for 2 turns unless destroyed.

~Name~: Wind Release: Shadow Clone
Type Ninjutsu
Rank:B-Rank
Element: Wind
Description: The user creates a shadow clone of compressed wind. The clone can't use jutsu like normal shadow clone but can physically attack the opponent and return gained knowledge to the user upon release. These clones are also more fragile than the usual shadow clone. However what they lack in defense and some offense, is a unique detonation. Upon being destroyed, the clones explode releasing a violent wave of "biting" or sharp wind that will slice at there body while knocking them of their feet a few meters.

Storm Release: Storm Cell:

Storm Release: Storm Bolt:

Storm Release: Sustained Surge:

Storm Release: Rapid Condensation:

Storm Release: Pressure Cooker:

Storm Release: Cloud Walking Technique:

Storm Release: Storm Fist Taijutsu:

*More will be added later I guess*

"These dogs tend to last for 2 turns unless destroyed."

No word play. They either last 2 turns or not. And what is 2 turns? 2 Posts? 2 of your posts? Be specific.


"the clones explode releasing a violent wave of "biting" or sharp wind capable of dealing a good deal of damage to the target and terrain."

What kind of damage? Is it cutting? or just force that knocks you out or knocks you back or to the ground? What is a good deal of damage? Be Specific.

Thunder Roar: Try to specify how much force the other weapon is pushed back with, I suppose you could use PSI or simple lbs. I have a Zanpakuto that has a similar effect.

Violent Wind Clone should be B or A Ranked. I'd go with B. I think it should be called 'Wind Release: Shadow Clone." just a thought.

Magnificent jutsu, save for the ones I mentioned, the rest are approved.

I believe I've addressed both of your concerns in my edits.

Be exactly specific on Thunder Roar I want numbers, because depending on how hard someone is holding their blade or how soft, their weapon may not be knocked out depending on its weight and the force of their grip.

Okay edited, how does 10 pounds of force sound to you?

Approved. So if your opponent doesn't specify he's applying more than 10 pounds of force, his attack is auto-rejected, and his weapon will slip from his grip. Also their attack will still be slowed so its easier to counter.

~Name~: Violent Wind Rotation
Type Ninjutsu
Rank: C-Rank
Element: Wind
Description: User creates a strong controlled wind current around them. The current takes the shape of a sphere with a diameter of 8 feet. Anything within the radius is safe. Anything to approach the sphere however will be faced with strong wind currents that will knock it back. This is a very good defense jutsu against most physical attacks and some weaker elemental ones. The sphere will only last for 1 post.

~Name~: Nightmarish Savage
Type Genjutsu
Rank: C-Rank
Element: N/A
Description: The user cuts himself across his palm, enough to make a bit of blood run. Using this image as the catalyst, he cast the genjutsu upon the viewer. Those caught will witness the user wildly transform into a giant white tiger, about 15 feet tall and and 10 feet long from head to tail. The tiger will then charge toward the opponent and attempt to crush the target with its paw. If the opponent allows them to be crushed by said tiger, the genjutsu is released isntantly. If they constantly fight the tiger or try to avoid it, they will remain trapped, leaving them vulnerable in reality. This genjutsu can easily be released with the Genjutsu Release Technique.

2nd - B-rank mostly because of the belief that any jutsu that leaves someone ultimately vulnerable should be B-rank or higher

Once the above is corrected then All approved except for the final one, being able to fry someone's nerves leaving something useless is completely unacceptable, and is too easy. I could understand burns them out temporarily, but thats too much to completely fry them forever. Also Its too much like LRA, enhancing the physical output of the user is basically a copy of this technique, I could understand if it did something else but not enhancing ones physical output.

I don't agree with your reasoning for my second jutsu. The temporary paralysis technique is D rank and can easily leave someone vulnerable. As this is a genjutsu, it leaves them vulnerable because they're perceiving something that is not reality. Plus its easy to get out of. Its nothing more than a form of trickery.

As for the last jutsu. I think being able to completely burn out someones nerves is acceptable. This is an enhanced version of a clan jutsu I already have which is D-rank. The original temporarily paralyzes and numbs. Since this is a very enhanced version at the rank of A, a three rank jump from the original, I believe the effects listed are justified. As for the bit about it being too much like LRA, I don't see how. Its focus isn't about enhancing my physical capabilities to a level that I can move faster than a flicker, and I did not write it as such. It says slight boost in agility/speed because of being more limber, which makes much sense. This technique does not enhanced my reaction and physical to such an extreme as LRA. Also it should be known that this jutsu is replacing a restricted jutsu I've earned, because I can not use it due to it being a A+ rank ninjutsu and there are no cannon substitutes I can replace it with due to class limitations. So this custom is made on such a level it would satisfy as a good replacement.

Sorry dante. , I'm going to have to go with Kain. Your second ablity reminds me too much of the Hyuuga's Gentle Fist. You're exerting chakra from any point upon the body very similar to the Hyuuga, when in manga you shouldn't be able to do this as only the Jyuuken users can.

Secondly it also appears as if you're as if you're targeting and organs, which isn't bad, but it also seems to be like a tech rip off as you're expelling chakra into organs.

Overall. It seems like a fusion of three canon jutsu.
LRA version one, Jyuuken, and Tsunade's mind disturbance jutsu.

Your speed isn't enhanced to the point like LRA, but the defense kinda seems to be an assoicate with it. As LRA has properties that allow for defense of Raiton affinity.

Work it out in a bit of a differnt area, or something mate.

Sigh, Bonten I can see where you make that connection with the gentle fist. The original jutsu this one is enhancing is compared to it in a sense. Im channeling an electric current onto my opponent at at neuron level, affecting the nerves of the body though. Your nerves are what channel the electrochemical transmissions from your brain to your body parts. This is why Im affecting limbs and organs, through nerves by way of electricity which can produce the effects I've stated. Im not attacking their chakra system so they can't use jutsu, im attacking there body itself so it just won't work correctly. Yes its similar to Tsunade's mind disturbance because her technique also affects the nerves and how they transmit, however the way she attacks them and I attack them are different. Also, unlike her technique, I could just destroy the nerves rather than disrupt them.

As for the LRA talk. If i cloaked my body in electricity, do you think it would be logical for other electricity to harm me? Wouldn't it make sense that I would be able to just use it as means of fuel for the cloak. Plus LRA had a lot more defensive properties outside of Raiton. It pushes the limit of the body to a monstrous level, which is something im not trying to gain here obviously. Im still vulnerable to other jutsus and physical attacks. My strength is not increased at all. My speed/agility are only increase a little, no where near the extent of LRA. So Im not seeing the connection between the two outside the fact that Im covered in electricity.

If you guys looked at the original custom jutsu which is at D-Rank, then maybe you can understand why Im ENHANCING it to such a level more fitting of an A-rank version.

Its listed as 'Storm Fist Taijutsu'
https://betatestninja.rpg-board.net/t301-tenraku-clan-jutsu

Going up 3 levels of enhancement from that stage, this makes sense. It should probably be noted that this jutsu is gonna take place as a restricted jutsu of mine because the one I currently have I can not use due to class.

I don't know why you guys making this seem so OP considering what stage its coming from and where Im taking it. :/

I know you're not stopping chakra flow, but the point I was making is that you shouldn't be able to extert chakra from any chakra point upon your body mate. The fact that they are higly similar is what makes it some what an iffy for me. This is simply to much for an A rank Kinjutsu (which is actually classified as Forbidden Ninjutsu)

Essentially this is what it would appear like to one who did not create the technqiue. Jyuuken for organ damage, MDs for reverse Nerves, and LRa for defense. The break down after reading your jutsu once more this is what it does.

1.Capable of damging organs (Jyuuken)
2.Able to Control and emit chakra from any point upon your body (Jyuuken)
3. Nervous System reconfiguration (Mind Distrubance)
4. Light Speed Boost, and Agility boost, also physical ablites slightly enhanced, but not to a extremely large degree. (Appears like a weaker version of LRA version 1)
5. Ability to nullify Ration and Storm Release chakra.
6. Ability to absorb Ration and Storm Release chakra to replenish yourself.
Seeing all this don't you think it's a bit much for an A-Rank techinuqe overal which you have listed as Taijutsu and Kinjutsu (which is actually just forbidden Ninjutsu which would at least be condiered S rank by category listing)

I understand the frustation of having stuff compared to other jutsu, as like LRA is the most powerful, and popular, but Naruto's Kyuubi boost, curse seal, and Eight gates all came first, but the problem is that over all your jutsu has to many things going for it. There aren't even any drawbacks for this jutsu that I can tell. Overall all looking at it once again and again. It starts to look Op.

As for the the nullifaction in ration chakra going from manga stand points it depends. There are only two-four instances of which I know of.

1. Kakuzu vs Kakashi his Gain vs kakashi's Rariki. They cancelled bout even though the Gain is a B-Rank ninjutsu,and Kakashi needed TWO S-ranks just to cancell it out.

2. Killer bee vs Sasuke. I think sasuke used his naganshi to halt or divert some of the camage from bee's ration charged swords, I don't remember 100%

3. Sasuke using Naganashi to stop some of the damage from Darui's lighting and water release combo.

4. Sasuke Chidori vs Raikagi Lighting Armor. These two classed and the chidori managed to create a small scarth upon his chest.

Now could I say you are in the wrong not wholely, because manga suggest an elment anity could possibly counter out another depending on it's properties, but however. You're compltely immune to Ration and Storm release techniuqes, whole absorbing them to refuel your chakra suppy. So, yeah I can agree you have some defensive properites, but overall being able to immuine to Ration and Storm release is a bit muh. Especially the Absorbtion.

So here is what we will attempt to do.
I need you to take some time, and remove 3 of the 6 I listed. Maybe two if you have a damn good draw back and cool down effect. Once that is done. I'll take another look.

Okay, Im scrapping that one for another day. I'll figure something out about this restricted jutsu. Just handle the others I have please. Thanks for the time.

Are you sure, when you just have to reconfigure some of this. If you are postive. You're approved for jutsu one and two.

~Name~:Mirror World
TypeGenjutsu
Rank:B Rank
Element:N/a
Description:The user casts this jutsu by first appearing as the target. This jutsu can be cast on multiple people, each person will see the user as themselves. Once caught, those targeted will have all off their movements reversed in reality without their knowledge. For them, Up is Down, Left is Right, Forward is Backward, Inward is Outward, Together is Apart and Vice Versa. This jutsu can be ended by simply landing a hit on the user, genjutsu release, or pain release.

Mirror World: Approved
Electric Wind Current: Denied.. it seems like a wind rasengan with electricity added.

Its not, its more like Kakuzu's Pressure Damage with electricity added.
http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Wind_Release:_Pressure_Damage

Then why not just go with his pressure damage jutsu and just add in lightning chakra?

Well I thought the addition of electricity would mean it would have to be made a custom but okay.

~Name~: Tempest Palm Strike
TypeTaijutsu
Rank:B-Rank
Element:Storm+Wind
Description: Using his Tempest ability, Dante performs a palm thrust. Within 5 inches of contact, Dante quickly compresses the air then releases it along with a fusion of storm electricity causing a explosion of wind and electricity with a forward blast spread being 2 meters wide and 5 meters long.

~Name~:Insidious
TypeGenjutsu
Rank:A-Rank
Element:N/A
Description:The user slams a palm upon the ground. Seeing this hand touch the ground causes the illusion that dead ninja are rising from beneath the ground. The number of dead bodies seems endless as they relentlessly go after the target(s). As the dead continue to rise, the world itself will seem to spin around to the user, as if they were on some spinning top. The pain felt from any attacking dead is completely inside of the target(s) mind for it is all an illusion. This can lead to great mental fatigue making them incapable of molding chakra and sluggish after release of genjutsu for a number of post equal to how long they were affected. A genjutsu release equal to A-rank chakra output from an unaffected source is needed for escape or a self-inflicted pain release equal to having a limb severed.(arm, hand, leg, foot, etc) The user must maintain the illusion and can not perform any other attacks/techniques from the point of using this jutsu until they release it completely. If the target(s) 'die' within the illusion than they will be unconscious for the remainder of the topic.

~Name~: The Pit
TypeGenjutsu
Rank:C-Rank
Element:N/A
Description: The user whistles a high pitched tune as the catalyst. Upon hearing this, the target(s) will witness the earth tremble and the ground beneath them open up to unimaginable lengths. They will lose sight of the user and fall a great depth of 200 ft into darkness. After each post(user and targets) they will have fallen 20 ft. If they hit the bottom, covered in spikes, they will be unconscious for the remainder of the topic. This can be released with a normal genjutsu release or self-inflicted pain release.

Approved

~Name~: Tiger's Roar
Type Ninjutsu
Rank: A-Rank
Element: Wind
Description: The user summons strong razor winds that manifest itself in the shape of a roaring tiger's head, 8 meters wide and 8 meters high. This wind travels as one massive blast a total distance of 15 meters before dispersion. This wind can easily clear a path of a forest, even shaving away part of the ground. The razor winds are as sharp as blades, creating deep lacerations on a body and able to even dismember parts of a body. The wind roars like a tiger as it travels.

~Name~:Soul Tap
TypeTaijutsu
Rank:D-Rank
Element:Storm
Description: The user, upon contact near the spine or brain of the target, sends a small electric signal into the nerves that will induce sleep the following turn for the remainder of the topic.

Approved.

~Name~: Solitude
Type Genjutsu
Rank: S-Rank
Element: N/A
Description: This is a genjutsu that allows the target to remain in reality while severing the mind's connections to the senses for the remainder of the topic. The catalyst for this genjutsu is both a visual and sound. The visual is the creation of a short series of hand seals. The sound being a simple phrase, spoken in time with the hand seals. The phrase being "Let Your Ignorance Hold You Captive". From that point of both seeing and hearing the two catalyst, the genjutsu will take effect over stages. Each begins during the user's posts. The genjutsu can be released at any moment by the user. It also does not require the user's attention once cast. For the target to release themselves from its effects they must go through the same process as with any other genjutsu. They first must realize they are under effects of a genjutsu. Once done, the requirements for release depend on the stage they are in. Outside help from an ally for release is not possible because they are unable to tell the nature of the jutsu since it allows the target to remain active in reality.

Stage 1: The target loses their sense of smell. (Pain Release: Small Stab, Genjutsu Kai: D rank Chakra Output)

Stage 2: The target loses their sense of taste. (Pain Release: Shallow Cut, Genjutsu Kai: C rank Chakra Output)

Stage 3: The target loses their sense of touch and feeling and the ability to sense chakra. (Pain Release: Deep Cut, Genjutsu Kai: B-Rank Chakra Output)

Stage 4: The target loses their sight. (Pain Release: Severed Digit, Genjutsu Kai: A-Rank Chakra Output)

Stage 5: The target loses their hearing. (Pain Release: Severed Limb, Genjutsu Kai: S-Rank Chakra Output)



~Name~: Tempest Storm Release: The Great Storm
Type Ninjutsu
Rank: S-Rank
Element: Storm + Wind
Description: Dante uses his ability to create an orb of compressed wind and storm release chakra between his hands. He then shoots the orb forward and upon contact the orb explodes into a strong tornado infused with intense electrcity. This tornado ranges 15 meters wide and 30 meters high. The orb travels through the air rather quickly and can travel a max distance of 30 meters before auto-detonating. Its winds have an inward pull ranging 10 meters from the tornado's walls, able to pull in things 600 pounds or less with some ease. The tornado is comprised of blade like winds able to cut through even rock with ease. The infused electricity causes numbing pain and paralyzing within the tornado. The tornado does not move and remains in place where the orb detonated. This jutsu has to be charged the post before using to form the orb, the user becomes more vulnerable during this time as they concentrate on its formation. This is when the jutsu can be disrupted before complete use. This jutsu has a cooldown of 3 posts.