The Exams: Life

Higeki arrived on a craft that had been crafted together rather quickly from some rope and planks that were lying around as he and his partner Kagejiro made shore on the island. He immediately jumped off and waited for Kagejiro before heading into the inner island that was teeming with life. "Come on! Quick! We need to be in a good position for a fight!" He wondered what enemies they would face here. I've got to win this.. for her..

Kagejiro jumped out of the boat. In mid air he pulled out his scroll, unrolled it, summoned his puppet, rolled his scroll back up, and put it back in the holder. He landed on the shore and the puppet was hanging on his shoulder. Kagejiro looked at Higeki as it started to rain. "we should get some cover first, wood sculpting technique!" Kagejiro formed a hand sign and the tree nearest to them formed two umbrella like objects of wood. Each one attatched to kagejiro and Higeki, forming a a light barrier against the rain and its effects.

Alexander wrote:

Like I mentioned before, while starting my post, the mist never ended for the two Konoha shinobi. As they were arriving with their boat, they could notice the mist vanishing from behind them, while it was still covering the area where they were and all around the shore to which they were heading. Not only that, this mist, it also covered the place where a young Kiri nin left his boat when he arrived, a few minutes before that. The visibility in this mist, it was half a meter or less, so even if someone stud a meter in front of them, they would not notice him. Using his sensory abilities he was able to track at which part of the island were those two going, so he carefully prepared an ambush for them. Knowing that this was a two against one battle, Alexander was aware of the disadvantage in which he was, so he had already created a copy of himself which could help him against the two Konoha shinobi. It was time for the battle to start.

From the shore, the copy of the real person was four meters away, waiting for the boat to reach it so that he could attack the enemies. He was standing under some tree, which prevented the rain from falling onto him. Though, it did not matter actually, since he was made out of the water from that rain. At that moment, the real individual was on a tree two meters to the left of the shore where the two were about to reach, holding a single kunai. Oh how this rain was annoying, it produced so much noise, and it was quite heavy in terms of its quantity and speed of falling. Just perfect for someone. Anyways, using his sensory, the young man detected one of the Konoha shinobi jumping high upwards, so he took that chance and threw a kunai at him before he even managed to take out the scroll. At all time Alexander knew where those two was and where his copy was. Not to mention, his attack was masked by the mist and the sound of the rain, so without a sensory ability he would not notice it coming. But, those two did not know it, unless they had the same kind of ability as he did. But, chances of that were low, Konoha was not known by having sensor type shinobi, unlike Kiri. Well, they did have the Hyuuga clan, but those were not actual sensors.

Anyways, on the other hand, upon hearing the boat stopping, the clone took action, launching his body forwards anyone who came out of the boat. Due to the low visibility in this mist, the two foes could not see each other till the moment when they were less than half a meter away. But, considering that the clone was holding a tantto in his right hand, stretched forwards in front of him, his foe would notice him only when the attack was finished. Indeed, the tantto would have appeared out of nowhere, aimed at the stomach area of the Konoha shinobi, way out bellow his sight. Due to the fact that this tanotto was approximately thirty centimeters long, maybe even longer, the rest of the clone would only appear by the time this attack made a hit. The real Alexander knew that his copy was going towards one of these Konoha shinobi, while his target was slowly walking towards him. It seemed that he was planning to enter further into the island, little did he know about the assault coming at him. The steps of his foe were masked by the noise of the rain falling, the young Kiri nin sure liked taking advantage of the weather, making his attack undetectable, they could not be heard or seen.

Upon launching an attack at his enemies, Alexander quickly performed a single hand seal, preparing for phase two of operation steal a scroll from a weaker foe.

Okay.. I don't feel bad for tearing this apart because there are way too many things wrong with it.

Let's start with the first thing.

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Like I mentioned before, while starting my post, the mist never ended for the two Konoha shinobi. As they were arriving with their boat, they could notice the mist vanishing from behind them, while it was still covering the area where they were and all around the shore to which they were heading. Not only that, this mist, it also covered the place where a young Kiri nin left his boat when he arrived, a few minutes before that. The visibility in this mist, it was half a meter or less, so even if someone stud a meter in front of them, they would not notice him. Using his sensory abilities he was able to track at which part of the island were those two going

First of all, you cannot enter the topic before its creation. And if this were in time a few minutes apart, we would have seen you coming into the island on your boat. The mist is only on the island and not in the water. On top of it all, you wouldn't have enough time to get out of your boat, hide, THEN use hidden mist. Back onto the topic of entering the topic before its creation, how would your character know to sit in that exact spot and wait for us? Wouldn't you really be more focused on moving forward to find someone and a scroll? This is an example of metagaming, whether it be intentional or unintentional.

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Knowing that this was a two against one battle, Alexander was aware of the disadvantage in which he was, so he had already created a copy of himself which could help him against the two Konoha shinobi. It was time for the battle to start.

From the shore, the copy of the real person was four meters away, waiting for the boat to reach it so that he could attack the enemies. He was standing under some tree, which prevented the rain from falling onto him. Though, it did not matter actually, since he was made out of the water from that rain. At that moment, the real individual was on a tree two meters to the left of the shore where the two were about to reach, holding a single kunai.

Once again we come into the time factor you have set for yourself. Within no excess of five minutes you were able to hide yourself in a tree, create a water clone, use hidden mist, prepare a kunai, sense us and be ready to fight? You're only a genin, you're nowhere near being able to do all of that. Also, hiding under a tree doesn't prevent you from getting hit by rain. Try it in real life, it doesn't work. So it doesn't work here either. Also, I can say that because the chakra absorbing rain is hitting your clone, it is also constantly draining the clone and disrupting the chakra holding it together. So really, your clone should have been dispelled the second you made it because of that. Oh and let me point out one more thing. You yourself stated you couldn't see a meter in front of you, so how would your clone even know when the boat made contact when it's four meters away?

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Oh how this rain was annoying, it produced so much noise, and it was quite heavy in terms of its quantity and speed of falling. Just perfect for someone. Anyways, using his sensory, the young man detected one of the Konoha shinobi jumping high upwards, so he took that chance and threw a kunai at him before he even managed to take out the scroll. At all time Alexander knew where those two was and where his copy was. Not to mention, his attack was masked by the mist and the sound of the rain, so without a sensory ability he would not notice it coming. But, those two did not know it, unless they had the same kind of ability as he did. But, chances of that were low, Konoha was not known by having sensor type shinobi, unlike Kiri. Well, they did have the Hyuuga clan, but those were not actual sensors.

Your sensory skills allow you to detect someones chakra, not tell you their movements. You wouldn't know to throw a kunai as he jumped because all you would know of is the chakra presence, not the exact location within the mist that you cannot see. Your aim would be extremely off and you would miss. Chakra sensing doesn't tell you jack squat about my waving my arm around at you, ESPECIALLY when you're blinded by your own chakra because of hidden mist. Really we shouldn't even be detected because you've camouflaged with yourself.

OH, I LOVE CONTRADICTIONS

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Oh how this rain was annoying, it produced so much noise, and it was quite heavy in terms of its quantity and speed of falling.

his attack was masked by the mist and the sound of the rain, so without a sensory ability he would not notice it coming.

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Anyways, on the other hand, upon hearing the boat stopping, the clone took action, launching his body forwards anyone who came out of the boat. Due to the low visibility in this mist, the two foes could not see each other till the moment when they were less than half a meter away. But, considering that the clone was holding a tantto in his right hand, stretched forwards in front of him, his foe would notice him only when the attack was finished. Indeed, the tantto would have appeared out of nowhere, aimed at the stomach area of the Konoha shinobi, way out bellow his sight. Due to the fact that this tanotto was approximately thirty centimeters long, maybe even longer, the rest of the clone would only appear by the time this attack made a hit. The real Alexander knew that his copy was going towards one of these Konoha shinobi, while his target was slowly walking towards him. It seemed that he was planning to enter further into the island, little did he know about the assault coming at him. The steps of his foe were masked by the noise of the rain falling, the young Kiri nin sure liked taking advantage of the weather, making his attack undetectable, they could not be heard or seen.

I was going to use the contradictions, but this entire paragraph is wrong, so there is no point. Let's start first with how you intended on hearing the boat make land when you stated that you can't hear -or- see anything at all? Your clone would have no idea what was going on to even launch himself at us, much less a sense of direction to know anything at all. His tanto might even end up inside himself from being stupid and flying forward in some random direction.

How in the world do you even know we're Konoha shinobi since you can't see? How do you know we're walking or where we are at? Or even your clone for that matter? You're blinded by your own chakra, and our very little chakra spans compared to all of this mist isn't even detectable because you've hidden us through your own moves.

And finally, how can you even plan an attack when you're BLIND and DEAF? That makes no sense, AT ALL.

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Upon launching an attack at his enemies, Alexander quickly performed a single hand seal, preparing for phase two of operation steal a scroll from a weaker foe.

And now you're using another jutsu.. With all of this rain and wasted chakra, you're going to be done by the time you can even make physical contact with us. There is this thing called exhaustion when you're a genin and you want to use more than 2 C-Rank jutsu combined with D-Rank and supplementary techs. Plus the rain, you really just hurt yourself more than anyone else here.

Everything in this post so far has been basically set up just so you can win. That's not how you RP. This post is an example of metagaming and godmodding. You need to post as your character and through your character's eyes and ears. You also need to stay within time limits, and just for future reference if you decide to repost, don't say you were already on the island because then you never actually came to it, which would be godmodding.

The rain fell hard down on these two hooded figures, hiding any sound that may escape their already silent running footsteps. A very dark and thick mist setting in the area before their arrival. An electric glow would emit from three figures that had already been present in the area, giving visual to their locations within this vision obscuring mist or rather fog. It made them appear as people made of light, with distinct shapes to see body movements. These approaching silhouettes did not have a glow however and seemed identical. The two figures running began to branch off into different directions, two small poofs could be heard and two more shrouded figure appeared consisting of the same physical properties as the others, running as well. Three of the hooded figures headed toward the three glows, one for each. Three booms of thunder had resonated from the three and another three booms from behind their destined targets, along with another set of three shrouded figures. As all closed in on their targets, long katanas were drawn with the quickest movement and swung, one could say in time that a certain important scroll was airborne. Each glowing figure would be faced with a single attack, left to right, steel to flesh. Wood for some other figure's case. However somewhat ahead of the initial booms of thunder, a small blade flew through the air, casting a silver line behind it in the cover of this thick mist. The blade being sent from the direction of the one shrouded figure that did not pursue a glowing target. This blade's trajectery would be eye level to one of the more fleshy targets, most likely the one that first appeared on the island to the attacker's unknown knowledge however. Yet all of this was occurring so quickly that it could be hard to process.

Who was the blame for this sudden and quite unexpected assault? It was none other than a furious mist swordsmen by the name of Dante and his clones, however which was the real Dante would soon be revealed. All of them had entered this area, chakra completely suppressed and unable to be sensed, in hopes of finding the chakra signal that Dante imagined feeling, well prepared in an attire that fended off this rain as well. However, it was impossible for him to do so (sense chakra), making this entrance rather lucky. It was a rather small secluded island anyway, so he was bound to run into someone close. Anyway, there was only one thing on this hooded swordsman's mind, and that was getting through this exam. He had been so blinded by his anger that he didn't care about what scroll these people had or where they were from. He would take his chances and find out afterwards.

The wind started to pick up, and Aisu put his hands into the pockets of his pants, warming them up as he ran, while staring off at different parts of the mist. The mist had started to collect on his face, and in his eyes, making it seem like he had been crying. His face showed no sign of fatigue, as people who crying often show. Aisu's jacket flapped in the breeze, and he was thinking about where his partner Dante was headed. He was crafting an idea of what they would doing though when the two stopped. Aisu then thought he had heard a noise, and looked around him, cautiously. The genin watched Dante disappear into the mist around them while three figures a bit off glowed. Aisu was confused as to what the glowing was but from what he could see the silhouettes were people. If so then he knew why Dante had stopped and went off on his on, he was trying to set up a surprise attack.

Aisu could feel all of them, this was because of one of the abilities his bloodline granted him. They were so connected to the genin now that he was currently echo-mapping the area around them. The things that made them visible was simply that they were immobile while the energy itself was always in motion. Aisu smiled, the picture he had painted in his mind's eye was a beautiful one. Now that everyone's position was accounted for it was time to proceed and help Dante with his attacks. Aisu then heard a poof from off into the distance while jumping upwards into the trees. The genin jumped forward from tree to tree until he was about twenty meters away from the glowing figures. The shapes looked nothing like his partner so he felt no hesitation to attack. Aisu did the specific hand seals and then separated both hands forming a rod of light between both, holding it similar to an arrow would be in a bow. Aisu pulled back on the arrow of light from the bow and fired six shots. This attack was perfectly timed so that the arrows would hit when Dante made his slashes. Aisu looked from in front of the trio, wondering if this attack would work.

Dante, I looked over all of your info. You don't have any chakra suppression abilities or detection. The mist is gone due to Alexander's post being invalid, nor do you have hidden mist jutsu. I'm not sure how we are appearing as lights or something to you as your bloodline doesn't explain that anywhere plus the fact you only have one jutsu from the clan. Plus, though this is still unconfirmed as it was, the chakra draining rain should also be dispersing your crow clones since they are nothing but chakra portrayed into a form. Since Aisu's post is following Dante's and dante needs to explain or repost, his post is currently being ignored as well due to the linking.

Me and Kagejiro will be continuing in the topic unless this is fixed.

Kagejiro grabbed the scroll in shock and looked over at higeki. He shrugged and jumped into the boat. To make sure noone would try and stop them kagejiro formed a hand sign and thought wood sculpting technique. The umbrella on his back and higeki`s moved over to the boat and formed a shield that would protect from attacks from the rear. He started singing an old time senju clan song as they left.

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Higeki hopped onto the boat in excitement and aimed over the shield his friend had created, using his fireball technique as a great thrusting force to blow them away from the island as they escaped with their scrolls.

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OOC: Sorry that you don't understand what's going on here, so let me break it down for you.

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The abilities granted by mixing an electric field and water is of course weather control, this chakra ability can shape and control storm clouds, it can also alter pressures, temperatures, and compositions of the air. Members of this bloodline are able to use storm release jutsu and techniques which are techniques that combine Lightning Release and Water Release to create bright beams of electricity that can flow like water. Furthering that, members of this bloodline have even honed the ability to supplement their own body, adding to the range of diversity in styles of jutsu.

The underline part granting me the ability to create a fog or mist within this area.

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Assassin: Can excessively use flicker ( means can use it multiple times )/can hide their chakra

My class grants me the ability to hide my chakra, also known as suppression.

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Name: Cloud Walking
Description:Firstly the user cast large, thick, dark gray, almost black, clouds throughout an area. Within these clouds the area seems to be affected by a thick black fog. This is used to obscure the vision of those within. The air within the clouds also grows hotter in temperature and feels heavy. However for the user it serves the purpose of an illusive movement. They can flicker away from any position within the clouds or fog and have water particles of the fog cast an exact replica or illusion clone in his place at the same moment. They can also create similar illusion clones in other areas of the cloud. With these being illusion clones, when they are attacked they simply whisp away. A granted perk is that this same ability can be used within a normal fog, example being Hidden Mist Technique. Since the cloud or fog is the effect of the bloodline, when viewed by Byakugan or Sharingan, it gives the same color chakra signature or color as the user themself, proving affective against doujutsu users. For those within the cloud who aren't the user, small light bluish sparks will fly around their bodies aiding the user in pinpointing their positions.

This is one of the clan's more defined abilities. The underline explaining the mist and the glow.

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Dante hair is a short and spikey dark brown, this including his facial hair. His eyes are a striking light brown, which give a golden look in the light, a well known trait of the Tenraku Clan. He wears a nice white long sleeve shirt which is slightly fitted to his body but a bit looser around his arms. The sleeves are loose because underneath each is a place where he can hide small bladed weapons such as kunais, shuriken and knives, all of which can slide down to his hand with the correct wrist motion. Above this is grayish leather, hooded jacket that is accented by a bit of velvet red. The jacket is snug fitting his muscular body. The sleeves cut short at his shoulder while the hood hangs over his face in a way that it always cast a dark shadow over his eyes and most of his face. Going across his right shoulder and diagonal his body is a dark brown strap that connects to a pouch on his left side which can hold various weapons and scrolls. Around his waist is dark brown, velvet red, and silver utility belt which can also hold various weapons. For the lower part of his body, he wears dark brown pants which are slightyly loose fitting and tucked within his shin high brown boots. Along the sides of his boots are slots for more small bladed weapons such as kunai, shuriken, and knives. To finish off the entire ensemble, Dante has a velvet red cape which connects from the top of his left shoulder to a part of his back. The red cape is short stopping a little past his backside. It is made of a strong fabric which is like a tightly knit chainmail of wire. The fabric can not be pierced, cut or torn by any means which is why the cape is often used to deflect projectiles.

This being my character's default attire unless otherwise stated when entering a topic. Only exposed part of my body would be my hands. And since when clones are made, they take on the same aspects of the creater, that leaves only their hands exposed. Also it was stated that this rain draining rate was pretty slow, and that through EXCESSIVE exposure would the effects be noticed when making contact with THE SKIN. With only the hands being the exposed part for the rain, I doubt that would be considered excessive nor should its slow rate just completely disperse a clone and that part wasn't even included in the description of the rain warning so how is that even valid.

Now will anymore explanation be needed, because I do believe this is good enough and justifies my actions. And if you choose to refute this as well, I'll be requesting a conflict resolution by other administration.

Dante wrote:

OOC: Sorry that you don't understand what's going on here, so let me break it down for you.

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The abilities granted by mixing an electric field and water is of course weather control, this chakra ability can shape and control storm clouds, it can also alter pressures, temperatures, and compositions of the air. Members of this bloodline are able to use storm release jutsu and techniques which are techniques that combine Lightning Release and Water Release to create bright beams of electricity that can flow like water. Furthering that, members of this bloodline have even honed the ability to supplement their own body, adding to the range of diversity in styles of jutsu.

The underline part granting me the ability to create a fog or mist within this area.

Understood, however this will take chakra, correct? And this also describes what would be used inside a jutsu, unless when I had looked over your clan I misunderstood that it was allowed by will?

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Assassin: Can excessively use flicker ( means can use it multiple times )/can hide their chakra

My class grants me the ability to hide my chakra, also known as suppression.

Just because you have the class doesn't mean you don't have to have the jutsu. Chakra suppression and detection are not in your jutsu list.

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Name: Cloud Walking
Description:Firstly the user cast large, thick, dark gray, almost black, clouds throughout an area. Within these clouds the area seems to be affected by a thick black fog. This is used to obscure the vision of those within. The air within the clouds also grows hotter in temperature and feels heavy. However for the user it serves the purpose of an illusive movement. They can flicker away from any position within the clouds or fog and have water particles of the fog cast an exact replica or illusion clone in his place at the same moment. They can also create similar illusion clones in other areas of the cloud. With these being illusion clones, when they are attacked they simply whisp away. A granted perk is that this same ability can be used within a normal fog, example being Hidden Mist Technique. Since the cloud or fog is the effect of the bloodline, when viewed by Byakugan or Sharingan, it gives the same color chakra signature or color as the user themself, proving affective against doujutsu users. For those within the cloud who aren't the user, small light bluish sparks will fly around their bodies aiding the user in pinpointing their positions.

This is one of the clan's more defined abilities. The underline explaining the mist and the glow.

This technique is not in your jutsu list.

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Dante hair is a short and spikey dark brown, this including his facial hair. His eyes are a striking light brown, which give a golden look in the light, a well known trait of the Tenraku Clan. He wears a nice white long sleeve shirt which is slightly fitted to his body but a bit looser around his arms. The sleeves are loose because underneath each is a place where he can hide small bladed weapons such as kunais, shuriken and knives, all of which can slide down to his hand with the correct wrist motion. Above this is grayish leather, hooded jacket that is accented by a bit of velvet red. The jacket is snug fitting his muscular body. The sleeves cut short at his shoulder while the hood hangs over his face in a way that it always cast a dark shadow over his eyes and most of his face. Going across his right shoulder and diagonal his body is a dark brown strap that connects to a pouch on his left side which can hold various weapons and scrolls. Around his waist is dark brown, velvet red, and silver utility belt which can also hold various weapons. For the lower part of his body, he wears dark brown pants which are slightyly loose fitting and tucked within his shin high brown boots. Along the sides of his boots are slots for more small bladed weapons such as kunai, shuriken, and knives. To finish off the entire ensemble, Dante has a velvet red cape which connects from the top of his left shoulder to a part of his back. The red cape is short stopping a little past his backside. It is made of a strong fabric which is like a tightly knit chainmail of wire. The fabric can not be pierced, cut or torn by any means which is why the cape is often used to deflect projectiles.

This being my character's default attire unless otherwise stated when entering a topic. Only exposed part of my body would be my hands. And since when clones are made, they take on the same aspects of the creater, that leaves only their hands exposed. Also it was stated that this rain draining rate was pretty slow, and that through EXCESSIVE exposure would the effects be noticed when making contact with THE SKIN. With only the hands being the exposed part for the rain, I doubt that would be considered excessive nor should its slow rate just completely disperse a clone and that part wasn't even included in the description of the rain warning so how is that even valid.

Your chakra is used to portray everything about you. You didn't make a naked clone and then dress it to cover it up, so it's only formed chakra to make an appearance.

Now will anymore explanation be needed, because I do believe this is good enough and justifies my actions. And if you choose to refute this as well, I'll be requesting a conflict resolution by other administration.

I will take part in a conflict resolution as I am just trying to work out what is wrong, I've had to deal with Alexanders post as well and you know how many things were wrong with it, though I am not comparing yours to his because yours is way better.

EDIT: It's not my goal to argue with you here or be enemies.. I'm just trying to point out what is wrong with people's posts so it won't continue happening. I've already noticed people getting approved improperly, so now I'm getting into this.

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*Yes it would require some chakra, and yes it describes some of the things that can be used to make advanced jutsus.(Such as the jutsu listed) The basics being by will.

*Okay, I understand your point there. My chakra suppression shall be ignored

*That technique is more of a granted default ability of the clan. It was not listed as a jutsu when the clan was registered nor does it follow the jutsu template, showing that it wasn't to be considered a jutsu.

*Okay I can also understand your point there, however, I don't see how this will just disperse a clone instantly with the draining rate. Maybe shorten the amount of time it last, which can easily be acknowledged in a following IC post.

*Now, seeing as we are on two different pages with the abilities of this rain and its effects on jutsu. A third party will be needed in my opinion, most likely the man that came up with it.

Ok I didn't want to be biased with this so I got an outside opinion on the matter.

1st. Crow clones take less chakra to form than regular clones. Thus there is less chakra in them. All a clone is, is a massive of moving chakra. So chakra draining rain would quickly eat through a crow clone because there is less chakra in it as compared to a shadow clone which takes more chakra to make and has more chakra in it.

Dante assumed that the cloud of smoke ( Being black ) advanced toward his opponents. Thus it was an auto-hit

Also we have jutsu and not abilities so that would also be a factor

Ok fine, both of our entrances are void. I want to fix this with my bloodline foremost.